Correction
What you wrote
Hello Mr. Smith, I writing you for ask about the room. I want stay 3 night in july. How much is cost? Also I need know if have breakfast. Thank you, Ayşe
Corrected version
Hello Mr Smith, I'm writing to ask about the room. I'd like to stay for three nights in July. How much does it cost? I'd also like to know whether breakfast is included. Thank you, Ayşe
What changed, and why
- I writing → I'm writing
The present continuous keeps 'to be': I am writing (short form I'm writing).
- for ask → to ask
Use 'to + verb' for purpose, never 'for + verb'.
- 3 night → three nights
A number above one takes a plural noun; in a formal email, small numbers read better spelled out.
- in july → in July
Month names are always capitalised in English.
- How much is cost → How much does it cost
A question needs an auxiliary verb, and the subject ('it') cannot be dropped.
- if have breakfast → whether breakfast is included
The subject was missing; in formal writing 'whether' also sits better than 'if'.
Three more natural phrasings
Could you let me know your nightly rate for July?
Is breakfast included in the price?
I'd like to book a room for three nights in July.
Word box
| Word | Meaning | Example sentence |
|---|---|---|
| inquire | to ask for information (formal) | I am writing to inquire about room availability. |
| rate | the price charged per night | What is your nightly rate in July? |
| included | part of the price, not an extra | Is breakfast included, or is it extra? |
In one sentence
Your meaning comes through; the real loss is in auxiliary verbs — the moment 'am' and 'does' drop out, the sentence sinks back to A2.
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